So, I helped Cyrus with his paper today. I wrote an introductory paragraph for him, but he didn't use it cos he says, 'No one in their right mind talks like me' or something like that. Anyways, this is what I wrote:
The people you meet are ultimately the ones who shape you into the person you'll be in the future. Each and everyone of us is conceived with a level of innocence and what dents that innocence is based on how everyone else affects us. You learn the importance, or rather the triviality, of the people who you cross paths with. They all change you in different ways. Some with great affect, and some with minimal. The person that immediately comes to mind is my ex-girl friend, [her name here]. She's helped me to reach the realization of love, and the pain that comes with it.
And, this is what he ended up using (he pretty much just reworded it, it works better for him that way?):
What truly defines one self is by the people they choose to associate themselves with which helps shape what they will become in the future. Everyone is born with their own judgment on how the world works, but based on who you associate with can change your belief. Some can affect you greatly and some will have no affect on the person whatsoever. Everyone I've crossed paths with in my life has made some kind of difference in it. If I can think of anyone who has made a significantly major difference in my life, the person that comes to mind would be my ex-girlfriend because she has shown me another view on how to live life by cherishing everything until it’s gone, she has given me a new meaning on the word love, and her for being my ex, she has given me the feeling of a broken heart.
Yeah, and I realized, that's probably the BEST paragraph I've ever written, and it wasn't even for me *tear. Why can't I write my own papers that well? Whaaaaat the flllluuuuck?!